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请根据下面六幅图,以“A Thankful Bird”为题,用英语写一篇短文。
要求:
1.短文内容要符合图画情景。
2.语句通顺,情节连贯,书写工整。
3.字数:80左右。
●学生习作:
A Thankful Bird
Leilei is a very kind boy. He often helps the①others. In one day②, when he went past a tree, he heard a bird sing③in the tree. He thought, “It is autumn now, and the bird must feel cold if it won’t④have a house in winter.”So he asked his father to make a bird-house. He put it in the tree. Soon the bird went into it. Leilei was very pleased. Next year⑤when the spring came, the bird thanked him very much. Whenever he goes past the tree, the bird always sing⑥for him. It seems that it is thankful to the boy.
●修改说明:
①此处表示“别人”而不是所有“其余的人”,应去掉the。②one day/morning/ afternoon/evening/night前面不可加介词in, on, at,因此In one day应改为One day。③鸟叫的动作正在进行,因此sing应改为singing。④条件状语从句应用一般现在时代替一般将来时,won’t应改为doesn’t。⑤此处表示相对于过去某一时刻来说的下一年,Next year应改为The next year。⑥主语the bird为单数,动词也应用单数,sing应改为sings。
●习作点评:
开篇交待句“Leilei is a very kind boy.”和末尾总结句“It seems that it is thankful to the boy.”增强了文章的照应性,and, so, soon等过渡性词汇的准确使用增强了文章的连贯性、逻辑性和可读性。然而本文也存在一些不足之处,出现了一些语言表达方面的错误,如冠词错误、介词错误、非谓语动词错误、时态错误、易混词误用、主谓语一致错误,但是从总体上讲本文不失为一篇成功之作。
●优秀范文:
Leilei is a very kind boy. He often helps others. One day, when he went past a tree, he heard a bird singing in the tree. He thought, “It is autumn now, and the bird must feel cold if it doesn’t have a house in winter.” So he asked his father to make a bird-house. He put it in the tree. Soon the bird went into it. Leilei was very pleased. The next year when the spring came, the bird thanked him very much. Whenever he goes past the tree, the bird always sings for him. It seems that it is thankful to the boy.
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John和你(李兵)是同班同学,他住在你们学校(二中)。你到他住处请他参加明天下午王红同学的生日聚会,碰巧他不在。请你用英语给他留个便条,邀请他参加,并告诉他王红家的路线。
注意:1.地点:图中 · 是王红家。2.聚会内容:唱歌、跳舞、吃蛋糕。3.短文要包括提示的所有内容要点,并注意格式。
●学生习作:
Dear John,












